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[desert breaks]

Prepare to get roasted muahahahahahha just kidding.

Starts off awesome. Love the build-up. Could have used a stronger snare however.

At 0:30 shit gets real. The voices are a great addition. It was interesting to hear them together with the beat and nothing else.

From 0:57 until 1:24 it kinda ruined it for me, doesn't seem to fit together with the rest of the song at all. The synth and the chords sound too mellow and off.

At 1:38, same as I said earlier, needs a stronger snare.

At 2:19 it's back to business, similar to 0:30. I consider these parts, and 1:52, to be the best parts of the song. They are the most catchy, there is a perfect balance between wobbly sounds and voices together with the beat.

Conclusion:
- Catchy as ¤&#()/)!#"!!!!!!
- Snare is too weak, especially at the build-up parts

So yeah you got roasted I guess :P

Sequenced responds:

Breakbeat generally doesn't have snares that loud.

The part at 0:58 was a bit experimental; just trying to fill in time I guess

[Zen.R.G - Simulation (Complextro)]

Starts off good but is quickly ruined by whatever the thing at 0:07 is supposed to be. The main melody seems to be off key at times. One minute in it gets much better though. I really liked the wobbly sounds! Great choice of instruments for the most part!

There is some room for improvement in the mastering though. One clear example is at 2:14. The drums are ear-piercing, think it would have sounded cooler if you had added some FX together with some white noise.
Or how about the transition at 1:30? The melody goes from being very separated to centered immediately. The volume throughout the song is fine however.

Conclusion:
- Catchy tune
- Needs better mastering

Basically not amazing but not terrible either. Better than average 3 stars though. Keep it up!

Zen-R-G responds:

That was a really helpful review! BTW, the thing at 0.07 was meant to be some 8-bit drums, and I was automating the high frequency band. I shouldn't have done that really. But I'll take your advice and try to improve my next songs with it. Thanks!

[.:Townsfolk Melody:.]

First of all, try to be a little more positive. If you dislike your music so much then maybe you shouldn't be a composer yet. More often than not, shown negativity tends to alienate other users. I'm not saying that you can't be pessimistic about your music because that would make me hypocritical, but try to limit it somewhat. Anyway,

I think you should have given the thunder a little more time to fade out before introducing the bell already at 0:02. Perhaps 8-10 more seconds? Also I think the pace is going forward at a velocity that is too fast.
The "xylophone sound" sounds more like a high pitched kick and there's not much melody to be heard from it. The synth that starts to fade in at 0:17 hurts my ears and is just annoying.
I like the part at 0:51-1:25 though, because it seems like you were taking the time needed to set the mood for the song. After that the song repeats it seems.

Conclusion:
- Too short, should be at least 1 minute longer, preferably even more
- Very repetitive, nothing stands out
- Tempo is too fast
- 0:51-1:25 is the best part, even though it's used earlier in the song
- Good use of audio samples

I apologise for coming off as rude, I understand that FL studio can be hard to work with since I'm new to the program myself. But I hope that I've helped in some way at least.

BlueAlpha14 responds:

Heat of the moment man :v I probably should edit the description..
And it was longer, but the rendering was screwed up lol.

-Ok let me respond in order:
I didn't want to extend the thunder. But I also did throw this together shortly.
-The repetitiveness is something I didn't want to break. There was a repetitive break but it was very glitchy. I would show you if I didn't overwrite the file.
-At 0:17 the rendering screwed up, it didn't match the X modulator automation I set up.
-The tempo is 130 BPM, that's really too fast? I didn't really notice it. I tend to find it hard to edit the tempo after I compose it a bit, there's are all things I could fix if I could save and re-open a .flp file.
-I figured the Xylophone would fit since the synth at 0:17 didn't seem right to use.

Don't worry about coming off as rude, I really appreciate criticism. Personally I haven't been able to really sit down and focus. While this was my most complicated track, I hope I progress more and more. As said, even when I fail someday I'll get featured and I will look back at stuff like this ^^. Thanks for the review and I will put this into consideration if I attempt something like this in the future.

~Alpha

[Escape Velocity (Level 1)]

Hmmm DnB? Sweet!! Anyhow, beginning starts strong. Nice how the snare starts to hit at 22 seconds in. Good use of the drums overall, could have used some stronger crash maybe. The melody has the right octave in my opinion. The synth at 0:57 is awesome Not as big of a fan of the part at 1:40-2:05, it kind of slows down the pace I think, having the hi-hat hit at 2 and 4 instead of 3 could have prevented that but that's just a small thing. But I'm excited to check out what the game is like.

cadence1 responds:

Very interesting feedback. I like how you were very precise with the timings - it helps quite a lot to understand comments better. Sometimes people say things like "I don't like that part that starts at around 2 minutes", and it's often hard to tell what part they actually comment on, especially if the music keeps changing often. Your comments were easy to understand, so thanks for spending time writing them.
I'm actually going to try to change that hi-hat timing at 1:40-2:05 to see how it sounds :)
Thanks again!

[Lunar Transmission]

It starts off ear piercing, way too loud! The picked bass 43 seconds in sounds very neat. The synth in the background is barely noticeable, not only should it have been louder, but also more prominent. I like the xylophone melody, it has a unique style to it.
I would consider 1:47 to be the "main theme" of the entire thing, I mean that it's the part that stands out the most. When the voices at 2:18 come in it sounds very Majora's Mask-like. Reminds me of the segment in the game where aliens invade Romani Ranch.
At 2:50 it sounds like it's repeating for the most part, with a few minor changes. To me that's not a weakness, but so is the way it ends, would have preferred if the last 15 seconds or so were faded out or something. And again, the audio at 3:07, 3:38 and 4:11 are loud to the point that they distract the ears from the rest.
The mixing could use some improvements. Most instruments sound too centered. For example at 1:55, another xylophone with slightly lower volume could have been added and panned to the right. Or how about the synth from the beginning? It would have sounded much better if it had a longer reach to the sides.

Conclusion:
- Cool bassline
- The volume & panning is unbalanced between the instruments
- Has a memorable melody
- Good variation

homchom responds:

Thanks for reviewing! I know it wasn't the best, but the fact that you thought some parts of it were very neat means alot. I will take these into consideration and might make a v2 later.

[Platformer [ Video Game Edition ]]

Yay I love Nintendo! Sounds mostly like a modern take on classic Pokemon music. Also reminds me a lot of Waterflame! I wouldn't be surprised if you told me this track was inspired by "Theme of Skyworld".
So right of the bat we can hear with a basic melody and a bass, classic-style chiptune! I adore the way the third and fourth synth join in. After the bassdrum started to kick at 00:42 I expected to hear a drop, but was disappointed when there instead was a chill DnB part followed by another bouncer.
I would refuse to believe that it was intended, but I think you did a great job at surprising the listener by opposing ones expectations. See, throughout the song I felt like it lacked strength. Probably because I'm used to mostly DnB and dubstep. But after listening to it a bunch of times I changed my mind and realized that it would ruin the whole concept of the song. That has now become what I like the most about it, it was done with great execution.
The chord progression is interesting, I can't tell which chords were used but it turned out great either way! The catchy Lo-Fi melody is absolutely beautiful, even if it could have used some more variety, could argue that it gets repetitive after a while. Plus points for having the tune from the beginning go along with it through most of the track. Also, the instrument that plays at 03:03 is very fitting, especially at 03:13 - 03:16 where it's heard best.
Good mixing! No instument sound louder than they have to (although the bass could have been just a tad louder about halfway into it). Also a little more echo mabye?

This has got to be my favorite track here on NG as of today, April 10th 2016!

Teckmo-X responds:

Thank you so much :D You've captured my song in a nutshell. Yeah I know there wasn't much to it but I guess it worked out quite well. See I understand that for some artists your work proceeds your reputation and ears come in all shapes and sizes not to mention aspects. Since your used to D&B I know how it can sometimes be difficult to follow a particular style someone else condones which is something that is hard to deal with in the music industry even for artists we love. It's like asking a Trance producer to make a remix of a Hip Hop song or a Rap melody and transverse it into their own mix. I appreciate the well written review, seriously this helps me a lot <3

[Predator]

Beginning starts off pretty good. The progression is alright. After 30-40 seconds it just goes downhill. I don't feel the punch. It lacks melody, not that is doesn't have one, but it's not memorable. The mastering could be slightly improved; needs stronger drums and more instruments. It sounds like everything is panned and nothing is left in the centre. There's also way too much reverb at 2:10. I like the actual sound of it, such as the bass and the lead synths, but there's much room for improvement.

Felocai responds:

I have to admit, that I didn't put as much effort in this, as I usually do in my songs and I somehow knew it's not that good, but I felt like I want to publish that track anyways, now I prodably wouldn't do that.
Anyway, the advices are always appreciated, so thanks!

[Curtains Closed]

Has way too much bass in the mastering; save that until the drop!! Interesting take on the genre, it doesn't follow the conventional rules; which I appreciate highly. However it sounds way too static, like certain parts of the song don't connect at all. It's not always a bad thing, but in this case it is. The part at 4:20 - 4:55 is very unnecessary, seriously, it fucking annihilated the shit out of my eardrums!! And the end comes very unnoticably. It's sounds like somebody hit the pause button before the real ending. Has way more potential than used, some changes applied and the song would be a lot better :C

TheRealCharlz responds:

Ok thanks :)